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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevants.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevants.
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The graph illustrates the mean carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per individual in four countries, namely the UK,
Sweden
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, Portugal and Italy from 1967 to 2007, a 40-year period. In detail, 1967 witnessed an average of about 11 metric
tonnes
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 of CO2
emissions
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 per person in the UK, which was the highest ever compared to the other countries at any given point. Followed by gradual declines until 2007, which was accounted for almost 9 metric
tonnes
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 of CO2
emissions
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 per capita.
Sweden
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,
on the other hand
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, started at an average of 8.5 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967.
Then
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, it rose sharply by the end of the first
decade
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 exceeding 10 metric
tonnes
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 for each Swedish.
Furthermore
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, Portugal started with subtle
emissions
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 at only 1 metric tonne individually in 1967.
However
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, the numbers soared dramatically to the end of 1997 at 5 metric
tonnes
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, which is 5-fold surprisingly. In the
last
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decade
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, they managed to level off their numbers to intersect with
Sweden
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 at 5.25 metric
tonnes
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 CO2
emissions
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 for each person, supposedly the least possible average in 2007.
While
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 Italy showed substantial increases in CO2
emissions
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 from about 4.5 to 6.2 metric
tonnes
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 in the first
decade
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, they controlled the pace through the remaining period and coincided with
Sweden
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's averages in the middle of the third
decade
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, at almost 6.8 CO2 metric
tonnes
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,
as well as
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 finished at around 7.5 metric
tonnes
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 CO2
emissions
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 per person.
Overall
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,
while
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 the highest
emissions
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 throughout the period were in the UK, the lowest
emissions
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 were in Portugal.
Besides
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,
Sweden
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 saw a fluctuation but finished with the least
emissions
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 as well.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, sweden, tonnes, co, decade with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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