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A friend of yours is thinking about appliying for the same course you did at university. He/She has askes for your advise about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give details of the course you took at the university explain why you recommend the university give some advice about how to apply write at least 150 words.

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Hii Jill, I hope you and the family are in the pink of health. I am writing
this
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 letter in response to your query on pursuing
two
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a
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year
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two-year
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post graduation
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post-graduation
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course
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 from Bridgetown
University
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 in
artficial
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artificial
intelligence
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.
Well
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Well,
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 the
course
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 is about artificial
intelligence
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 including AI tools as
course
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. You will get updated on every aspect of Artificial
intelligence
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during
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for
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two
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a
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year
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two-year
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 duration. I am recommending
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university
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this university
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 because it is one of
top
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the top
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 ten
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university
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universities
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 to study computer science in
entire
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the entire
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 UK.The
university
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 has
updated
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an updated
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syallbus
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syllabus
,
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a well
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well stocked
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well-stocked
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 library and lots of
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to have internships in companies like Microsoft, Facebook and Google. You can apply to
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university
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the university
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 by logging onto
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university
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the university
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 website and
choose
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choosing
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post
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a
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 graduate
course
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 in Artificial
Intelligence
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. After
that
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that,
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 you need to download
application
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the application
an application
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 form and
filled
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fill
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 it
.
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out.
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Then
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 upload the form
along with
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 fees paid details like mode of payment. Once they confirm
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the fees
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fees
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fee
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 paid status, You will be admitted into the
course
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 for
next
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the next
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acadmic
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academic
 year. I hope you will like my advice and will take positive action on that. Warm wishes, Jay McGill

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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph covers a single main idea. For example, explain the course details in one paragraph, reasons for recommending the university in another, and application advice in its own paragraph.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, use transition words and phrases to link your ideas more smoothly. Words like 'Firstly,' 'Additionally,' and 'In conclusion' can be helpful.
task achievement
Though you have responded to all parts of the prompt, some sections can be expanded for clarity. For example, include specific details about the AI tools and subjects covered in the course.
greeting and closing
Your letter begins with a warm greeting and ends with a friendly closing, creating a positive tone throughout.
task achievement
You have given good advice and information on the application process, making it easy for your friend to follow.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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