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The map shows what an area looked like in 1986 and in the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows what an area looked like in 1986 and in the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the two maps illustrate significant changes in a particular
area
Use synonyms
 in 1986 and now .
it is clear that
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 there have been several
development
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developments
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 in the
area
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 , mainly in the
center
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centre
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 of
this
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area
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 and
also
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 some parts
such
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 as
bridge
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the bridge
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 and post office
havent
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haven't
altered
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been altered
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. the most
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 change from 1986 until
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the persent
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persent
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present
per cent
 is the elimination of the farmland with different animals near the primary school and
also
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school
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the school
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 has been extended for more pupils . garden and
large
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the large
a large
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 house next to the farmland has been replaced with
retirement
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a retirement
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 home . moving into
further
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 detail,
post
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the post
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 office
see
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sees
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 no changes ,
while
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 various shops with different usage
has
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have
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 been added next to it.
moreover
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,
due to
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population
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the population
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 increase in
this
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area
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 , several houses
has
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have
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 been constructed for the residents around the city .
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 it is obvious that
river
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the river
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 stoke and the bridge over it experience
same
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the same
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 figure as before.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban development
  • residential buildings
  • commercial buildings
  • infrastructure
  • recreational facilities
  • population growth
  • living standards
  • green spaces
  • environmental concerns
  • transportation networks
  • connectivity
  • accessibility
  • economic development
  • land use
  • agricultural
  • vacant lots
  • developed properties
  • functionality
  • economic landscape
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