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The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed, and full-time) between 1985 and 2005.

The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed, and full-time) between 1985 and 2005.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of women and men who work on housework on part-time and full-time in the United Kingdom between 1985 and 2005. The general overview here is that over the period there was a significant increase in the working group of girls from 1985 to 2005 between 6 and 7
hours
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 spent on housework,
while
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 in the proportion of boys there was below 2
hours
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 from 1985 to 2005.
According to
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 the data, in the working group between unemployed women and female part-time employment, In 1985 and 2005, there was spending from 6 to 7
hours
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moreover
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 starting at 5 and ending at 6
hours
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.
Furthermore
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, in the sector of a lady with full-time employment and gentleman with full-time employment,
as well as
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, in 1985 and 2005, the first group of workers there was spending time around between 1 and 3
hours
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,
also
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, there was spent time under 2
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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