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The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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the maps illustrate the development of the
garden
park
 in 1920 and now.
it is clear that
 there have been several changes mainly in the
center
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centre
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 of the
garden
 over the given period and
also
 there is no alteration in some parts of
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the grance
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grance
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France
park
such
 as
the
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apply
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both entrances and the rose
garden
 on the north side of the
park
. it is
also
 worth mentioning that
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the
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glass door has been replaced by
water
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a water
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 feature on the
south west
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southwest
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 of the
park
. the elimination of the pond which was used for watering the plants is one of the significant changes.
moreover
 , they built
new
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a new
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childern
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children
children's
 playground in
this
 part of the
park
. next to the
playground
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playground,
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 there is a cafe
instead
 of the
pervious
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previous
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 rose
garden
.
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Furthermore
furthermore
, the number of
rose
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the rose
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garden
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gardens
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 has been reduced . in
further
 detail, several seats have been added to the
park
 for more convenience .
also
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also,
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 the new rose
garden
 has been erected in the
center
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centre
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 of
park
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the park
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 ,
where
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which
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 is
surronded
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surrounded
 by many seats. the rose
garden
was
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used to be a fountain.
in addition
, the
improvment
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improvement
 of
stage
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the stage
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 and made into the
ampitheatre
Correct your spelling
amphitheatre
 is a considerable difference in these maps.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words garden, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pond
  • northwest corner
  • large central open area
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented space
  • playground
  • eastern border
  • parking lot
  • convenience
  • commercial zone
  • amenities
  • walking path
  • encircles
  • joggers
  • accessible
  • entrances
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