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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These
table
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 and
chart
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 illustrate the data given about
tourists
 going
on
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 a holiday resort in Australia. The chart information is given by a percentage with 4 main
regions
 which are (Asia, Europe, US, and other
regions
),
whereas
 the table below is represented by numbers and exact written data about each region along their
lenthg
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length
 of stay, most popular accommodation and main activities. On the one hand, portions are given in the chart with the 4 primary
regions
, where Asia
are
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 the top number of
tourists
, in contrary
of
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 the other
regions
 which are the least by tourism.
On the other hand
, the data
of
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 the table indicates
for
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us
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that the European
tourists
 stayed the most in comparison with the other
regions
,
while
 the Asian
tourists
 stayed the less of them all alongside staying in a 5-star hotel, in
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of
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 European and
tourists
 from
other region
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another region
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 which stayed in camping or caravan, and Americans staying in a 4-star hotel.
Asian
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 and Americans went
on
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sightseeing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, regions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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