The chart below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart delineates how many adolescents who are
in
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the
age
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ages
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of 15 and 24 did not have an occupation and the total
number
of unemployed
people
in five distinct European nations in 2005.
Overall
, the
unemployment
rate among 15-24-year-old
people
were
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far higher than the total
number
in all countries.
In addition
, the figure for
Poland
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Poland's
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unemployment
had by far the the highest
number
throughout the period and the reverse was true for that of Denmark. The proportion of unemployed
people
in Poland
initiated
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increased
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at
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more than 35%,
at
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which
it
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apply
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saw a vigorous decline in the
number of
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total
unemployment
rate in the same country
at
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exactly 15%. Regarding Italy’s and Hungary’s data,
while
they had a comparative homogenous point in the figure for
overall
unemployment
at approximately 8%, they were different in the percentage of
people
who did not have a job between the
age
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ages
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of 15 to 24 years old at under 25% and more than 15% equivalently. Nearly 15% of Germany’s
people
did
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who did
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not have an occupation were in the
mid range
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age of 15 to 24 years old, compared to a lower
number
at precisely 10% of total unemployed
people
in the same nation. A similar change can be seen in the proportion of Denmark’s rate, more than 5%
people
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of people
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were unoccupied, which doubled the
overall
unemployment
ratio in
this
country.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, unemployment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • youth unemployment
  • overall unemployment
  • comparison
  • percentage
  • aged between
  • economic conditions
  • educational system
  • vocational training
  • long-term impacts
  • policy changes
  • job training programs
  • disparity
  • national unemployment rates
  • European countries
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