The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the trips made by teenagers aged between 5 to 12 years old in the years 1990 and 2010, who used different forms of
transport
system.
Overall
, teenagers used private cars and walked more than other transport
systems in both years, however
, the children showed less interest in cycling and walking and
Correct word choice
apply
bus
. Cycling was less used by the
youngsters.
It is conspicuous that in 1990, children adopted walking as compared to other Correct article usage
apply
transport
systems, it was 12.20 million
. Secondly
, these children used the bus
which was about 7 million
in the same year. These passengers used only 4.10million in 1990, which was the lowest among all transport
systems. Whereas
, cycling and walking and bus
were at least 6.1 million
and 4.9 million
respectively.
Probing ahead, in 2010, these students us
ed private cars about 12.20 million
, which was the highest among all modes of transport
. Secondly
, these became more aware of their health and walked about 6 million
in the same year. In addition
, cycling was the least method used by these students, it was 2 million
in 2010. Further
, bus
and walking and bus
were 5 million
and 3 million
respectively.Submitted by rbtech65 on
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