The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram and table provided helpfully lay out the percentage of
tourists
that
stays
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stay
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within the resort based on their region of origin. Each origin
have
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has
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different traits
such
as average length of stay, most popular
accomodation
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accommodation
, and their main activities. Let us start by examining the pie chart. As we can see, the chart is divided into 4 portions, which are Asia, Europe,
US
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the US
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, and other countries.
Firstly
,
the
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most people that stay within
this
establishment
originates
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originate
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from Asia, taking up to 37%.
Then
, the second most common origin is Europe, just a little shorter than the previous region, which is 35%
from
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of
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the
overall
tourists
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number of tourists
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.
Then
, the third one is
US
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the US
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and the
last
one is people
that
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who
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comes
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come
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from various origins. Moving on to the
next,
we can see from the table that European
tourists
often stay the longest, averaging
on
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16 days.
While
, Asian
tourists
tend to stay the shortest, usually around 7 days.
However
, during their vacation, Asians often stay at the 5-star hotel.
Although
the establishment
have
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has
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5 and 4-star hotels, camping and
caravan
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caravans
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have
also
become a popular choice of
accomodation
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accommodation
by European and other
tourists
which comes from different regions.
Lastly
, each tourist groups have various main activities. Asian and US
tourists
often come for sightseeing.
Then
the Europeans mainly
swims
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swim
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and
sunbathes
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sunbathe
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,
while
the
tourists
from other regions
favors
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favor
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surfing. In conclusion, the chart and table
describes
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describe
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the tourist groups that
stays
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stay
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within a holiday resort, along
each
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with each
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of their characteristics.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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