The charts below show what UK graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The charts below show what UK graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The given bar chart illustrates differences in the number of graduated and postgraduated
students
who had not worked in full-time
job
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end up doing other activities in 2008.
Overall
,
students
who have bachelor's degrees and master's degrees mostly prefer their journey by
further
study and doing part-time work.
And it
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is noticeable that the number of graduate
students
is ten times greater than postgraduates.
Firstly
, more than half of the
students
in the first group decided to do part-time work and nearly the same amount stayed unemployed, about 56- 57% respectively.
Moreover
, almost 99% of them preferred to continue their study.
Secondly
, about 90% of graduates from the second group considered working as a part-time employee and slightly more people chose to gain more knowledge. The amount of
students
who preferred doing volunteer work is the same amount as it was in the first group, about 15% of the total number of graduates.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • statistic
  • unemployed
  • voluntary
  • postgraduate
  • part-time work
  • graduate students
  • full-time work
  • enroll
  • higher education
  • alternative career paths
  • trend
  • not engaged in full-time employment
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