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The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.
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The chart illustrates the average time spent on manufacturing
cars
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 of 4 different brands in the US
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 General
Motor
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, Ford, Toyota, and Honda.
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, there was a diminishment in the
hours
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 of producing
cars
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 in
four
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the four
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 lines examined.
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, all kinds of
cars
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 generally remained
their
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 ranks resembling the beginning of the period, despite some fluctuations throughout these years . The amount of time
went
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 into making
cars
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of
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 General
Motor
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 started at precisely 28
hours
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 in 1998, after which it experienced a gradual rise to 31 in 2001, before ending the period at just under 22
hours
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.
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, the figure for the time spent on creating
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 of Toyota was
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accurately 22 in 1998, followed by a growth to nearly 24 in 2002, in spite of an unremarkable decrease in 2001, after reaching 20
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 of the
years
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year
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. About 32
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 were spent on manufacturing specific vehicles of Ford, with a considerable drop to roughly 25 in 2002, and a final gradual decline to 22 in 2005. Simultaneously, the figure for
hours
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 of inventing particular transportation of Honda hovered around 23 between 1998 and 2002, followed by a marginal slump to exactly 20
hours
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 in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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