The charts below give information about children under 18 learning musical instruments in one region of the UK in 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant .
The pie and bar charts illustrate information about juveniles' tendency towards learning musical instruments and the favourite
unstruments
for learning in the UK in 1996 and 2016.
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instruments
instrument
overall
perspective, the figure of leaners
increased from 1996 to 2016. Correct your spelling
learners
In addition
, their preferences towards the most popular musical instrument
changed from a piano
into
a keyboard.
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was
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a minors'
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minor's
priorities
and just 44% Fix the agreement mistake
priority
among
offspring were Change preposition
of
intrested
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interested
leaning
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learning
this
skill. Moreover
, a keyboard was a popular instrument
among them, accounting for 30%, followed a
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by a
piano
at more than 20%. In stark contrast, 'other' was the least favourite instrument
, at less than 5%.
It is readily apparent that the ratio of educators noticably
rose to 76% in 2016, from 44% in 1996. As the popular Correct your spelling
noticeably
instrument
had been a piano
in 1996, it changed into a keyboard, at 30%, and the piano
ranked the
second favourite one. Change preposition
as the
Furthermore
, 'other' and also
an acoustic guitar was ranked bottom, lower than 5%.Submitted by TUTOO on
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