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The graph below gives historical information and projections about changes in population in the United States, Nigeria and Japan.

The graph below gives historical information and projections about changes in population in the United States, Nigeria and Japan.
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The line graph shows information about the number of
population
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 which changed, in the USA,
Nigeria
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 and
Japan
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 over a centenary between 1950 and 2050. In general, what can be seen from the graph is that the value of
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population
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 in
Nigeria
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 increased dramatically
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 the value of
Japan
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 leveled off
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. Looking at the details, the rate of
population
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 in the United States made up around 180
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millions
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 went up
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 about 450
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 over a centenary. With respect to the rate of
population
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 in
Japan
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stoot
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stood
 at approximately 100
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millions
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. At
this
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 it remained stable at over from 1950 to 2050. If we look at the rate of
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 in
Nigeria
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, it constituted almost 50
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millions
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. After that, it rose suddenly until just under 600
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millions
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 between 1950 and 2050. Another interesting fact, the quantity of
population
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 in
Nigeria
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 crossed
on
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a little more than 150
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millions
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with
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Japan
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 and crossed
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just over 400
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millions
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with
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 the United States.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, nigeria, japan, millions with synonyms.
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