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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. at least 150 words.
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The line chart displays
that
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the
number
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 of overseas
visitors
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 to three different
areas
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 in a European country from 1987 to 2007. The line chart
displays
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shows
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 that the
number
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 of overseas
visitors
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 to the
coast
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coastal
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areas
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 slowly decreased from 1987 to 1992
about
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by about
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 40
thousand
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.
Then
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 it kept an upward trend fast to about 75
thousand
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 in 2017.
In addition
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,
date
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data
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shows
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show
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 that the
number
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 of mountain
visitors
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 has never declined since 1987, which is about 35
thousand
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.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of tourists in the lakes area rapidly rose from 10
thousand
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 in 1987 to 75
thousand
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 in 2002, and the
he
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number
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 of tourists in the lakes area rapidly declined between 75
thousand
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 in 2002 and 50
thousand
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 in 2007. In summary , the data display that the
number
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 of
visitors
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 in the three different
areas
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 has Increased in several years.
However
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, compared with the other two
areas
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 of the country, the
number
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 of
visitors
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in
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to
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 the lake kept
downward
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a downward
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 trend fast in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, areas, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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