Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own answers.
It is believed that expert
people
who are educated in a country
should be employed in that country
. There are both for and against this
statement. Personally, I disagree with this
opinion. in this
essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument.
On one hand, the government
allocate a huge amount of money to the education of citizens. Indeed, creating infrastructures, and numerous schools, and also
instructors need enormous financial resources that the government
is accountable for. For example
, students who want to become doctors or engineers need a wide range of facilities. Therefore
, educated people
consume financial resources and use the facilities of the country
that are created by authorities. In fact, If these educated people
immigrate to another country
, society will lose human resources.
On the other hand
, individuals have the right to make decisions about where to live. In other words
, If the government
prohibit the expert people
from going overseas, it means that the government
is taking their freedom, leading to chaos among individuals because this
action creates dissatisfaction in society. Alternatively, the government
can take measures to people
stay in their own country
, the most important of which is boosting the standard of living to tempt people
to stay in their own country
.
To conclude
, some people
think that those who are educated in the country
should be occupied in the same country
in order to avoid wasting money invested in them. Personally, I believe that people
should have the freedom to decide where to go.Submitted by fatemeh1994bahrami on
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Try to incorporate more specific examples to better illustrate your points. Using statistics, studies, or real-life examples can strengthen your argument and make it more convincing. For instance, mention a specific country where professionals trained there chose to work abroad and discuss the impact.
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Work on crafting more fluid transitions between paragraphs and ideas to enhance the overall flow of the essay. This will make your writing more readable and logically structured.
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Pay attention to small grammatical errors and the appropriate use of conjunctions. Although minor, they can impact the clarity and readability of your essay. For example, changing "in this essay" to at the start of the sentence to "In this essay" would be one such improvement.
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You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame your essay effectively. This makes it easier for the reader to understand your perspective from the outset and provides a tidy finish.
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Your response addresses both sides of the argument, indicating a balanced view which is important for Task 2 essays. This demonstrates that you can consider multiple perspectives on an issue.