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Nowadays cultures of different countries are becoming more similar than they use to be. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

#cultures #countries #development
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people
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life
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style
. Most of them are willing to
adhering
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 the foreign
culture
 and
reluctance
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 to follow their own
culture
.
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about
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the attributes behind
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this
 and whether it will
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society or not. Analyzing
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 is technological growth. At present,
the
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communication is very fast all
people
 are using
smart phones
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smartphones
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 and have an account in social media through
this
 another country
life
style
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 can
learn
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 easily.
Moreover
, commuting from one country to another has become now very common,
hence
people
 have more keen and enthusiastic to follow
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the western
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western
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culture
.
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,
due to
globalization
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 many foreign items are easily available in the market
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 affordable
price
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. To
illustrates
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, my nation normally
eating
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 food by using empty hands but at present most of them are using
fork
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,
spoons
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instead
 of hands.
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, despite the cultural similarity will
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 to give demerits
also
.
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 the inculcation of foreign
culture
 the
countries
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 traditional activities may
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to
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disappear.
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,
the
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life
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lifestyle
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style
 and food habits will
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to
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change. It will not give
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For instance
,
my
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 native country most
of
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the
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people
 are
endeavoring
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 to avoid
the
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traditional foods
to eat
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instead
of
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that
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they are giving prior to
eat
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 fast foods like pizza and
burger
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. In a
nut shell
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,
technology
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 development is an inevitable one and
people
 should know about
another
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other
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 nation’s cultures and
life
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lifestyle
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style
. At the same
time
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 they must be not
allowing
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 to boycott their own
culture
. Because
,
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 it is
the
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 identity
of
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them
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from where we born.
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supported main points
The discussion about technology and globalization as reasons for cultural similarity is well-founded.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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