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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables illustrate the amount of money earned from
coffee
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 and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in various European nations.
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, there was an upward trend in
both
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 goods between
two
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the two
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 years, except
the
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for the
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 figure for bananas in Sweden and in Denmark. The
UK
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 gained the most budget in
both
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coffee
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 and bananas compared to other countries.
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 the sales of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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, Switzerland earned 3
millions
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million
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of
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euros
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 from selling
this
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 in 1999, followed by 1.8 and 1.5
million
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euros
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 in Denmark and
in
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the
UK
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 respectively. The lowest figure belonged to
both
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 Belgium and Sweden
in
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this
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 year, accounting for
lower
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less
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 than 1
million
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euros
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.
However
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, after 5 years, the
UK
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 dominated the most money gained from selling
coffee
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, with the figure increasing 14 times, from 1.5 billion
euros
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 in the previous year to 20 billion
euros
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 in 2004. The other data climbed to around 1 to 6
billions
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billion
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of
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euros
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. Regarding bananas’ sales, the figures for the
UK
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 were the highest in
both
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 2 years, recording 15
millions
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million
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of
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euros
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 in 1999 and treble to 47
million
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euros
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 in 2004. Switzerland and Belgium experienced a dramatic increase, to 5.5 and 4
millions
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million
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of
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euros
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 in 2004 respectively.
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, Sweden and Denmark declined to less than 1
million
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euros
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 over the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, both, uk, euros, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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