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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the arrivals
on
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 three different museums in London from June to September 2013.
Overall
, most people
visiting
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visited
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 the British
Museum
 throughout the period.
Although
 the visitor
of
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to
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Natural
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the Natural
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 History
Museum
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Museum is
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initially
 as high as the former, it
then
 fluctuated during the survey time.
While
 the tourist of Natural History
Museum
 saw the lowest number compared to
two
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the two
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 other destinations.
In
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At
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 the beginning of Summer 2013, the arrival rate in
British
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the British
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Museum
 was 600
thousand
 arrivals. It
then
 witnessed a remarkable fluctuation over the period between approximately 500 and 750
thousand
 visitors. There was around 600
thousand
tourist
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tourists
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 that came to the Natural History
Museum
 in June 2013,
then
 it saw a sharp decline to about 400
thousand
 visitors. It plateaued for a month before
experienced
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experiencing
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 a slight
increased
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increase
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 to just under 500
thousand
 tourists. Only a handful of people attended the Science
Museum
 over time. In June 2013, it attracted 400
thousand
 visitors,
then
 slowly decreased in the next two months before
raised
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rising
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in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 just over the original level.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, thousand with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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