The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the arrivals
on
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three different museums in London from June to September 2013.
Overall
, most people
visiting
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the British
Museum
throughout the period.
Although
the visitor
of
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Natural
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the Natural
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History
Museum
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initially
as high as the former, it
then
fluctuated during the survey time.
While
the tourist of Natural History
Museum
saw the lowest number compared to
two
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other destinations.
In
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the beginning of Summer 2013, the arrival rate in
British
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the British
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Museum
was 600
thousand
arrivals. It
then
witnessed a remarkable fluctuation over the period between approximately 500 and 750
thousand
visitors. There was around 600
thousand
tourist
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tourists
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that came to the Natural History
Museum
in June 2013,
then
it saw a sharp decline to about 400
thousand
visitors. It plateaued for a month before
experienced
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a slight
increased
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to just under 500
thousand
tourists. Only a handful of people attended the Science
Museum
over time. In June 2013, it attracted 400
thousand
visitors,
then
slowly decreased in the next two months before
raised
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in
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the end of
period
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the period
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just over the original level.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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