Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
While
some people believe that our problems
of environmental
system nowadays, Add an article
the environmental
is
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are
diying
out some Correct your spelling
dying
of
plants and animals, others think that Change preposition
apply
this
problem have
bigger Change the verb form
has
resons
. I believe Correct your spelling
reasons
rather
group because of warming the Change the article
rather a
Ozon
and Correct your spelling
Ozone
poluutions
are Correct your spelling
pollutions
solutions
pollution
clear
deal of these Correct article usage
a clear
problems
.
Lossing some plants and animals it
is effective Correct pronoun usage
apply
of
environmental Change preposition
in
problems
because of the roles that they were playing
when they were alive Wrong verb form
played
such
as the CO2 that some specific trees produced or cleaning destories
of the earth by a type of Correct your spelling
de stories
vegiterian
animals that were helpful in the past years; Correct your spelling
vegetarian
however
, these activities are doing through another types
of Replace the adjective
another type
other types
majorments
. Correct your spelling
major meets
SO
they are not so effective any more Correct your spelling
So
and
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apply
another
changes have Replace the adjective
other
created
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been created
for solving
these Change preposition
to solve
problems
because of that they are not as big as being a serious issue.
Most
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The most
importantly
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important
deal
is warming Ozon and Add an article
the deal
polutions
namely, air and water. Correct your spelling
solutions
pollutions
For
example
how warmer the earth is, living is harder and when the weather is not clear our health is Add a comma
example,
get
injured. Verb problem
apply
Atending
to articles that Correct your spelling
Attending
Cambdrige
University has written, Correct your spelling
Cambridge
humens
health care have to be almost 50% more than 10 years ago because of the warming and Correct your spelling
humans
human
polution
gets more in Correct your spelling
pollution
recantly
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recent
recently
decade
and it is so dangerous for Fix the agreement mistake
decades
childreen
who are spending their Correct your spelling
children
times
out of Fix the agreement mistake
time
home
for educations because of the time when they spending in dangerous situations which is Correct article usage
the home
destory
of weather. So Correct your spelling
destroy
it is clear that
these two reasons are more serious and bigger than the first beleiving
.
In Correct your spelling
belief
conclosion
,not Correct your spelling
conclusion
also
the types of plants and Rephrase
only
animlas
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animals
what
were lost it is not so effective but Correct word choice
that
also
another
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other
problems
are more serious. That is
so necessary for govenments
to do some creation or majors for solving these matters before gets late.Correct your spelling
governments
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Be sure to use more accurate language and improve your grammar to make your ideas clearer.
task achievement
You have addressed both views as required by the prompt.
coherence cohesion
You have made an attempt to provide a conclusion, which is important for rounding off your essay.
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You have shown an understanding of the topic by identifying the key problems related to the environment.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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