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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart displays the
expenditure
 of two European countries on five types of consumer goods in 2010.
Overall
, cars, books, and cameras became
UK's
Correct article usage
the UK's
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 biggest spending in 2010. Meanwhile, computers and perfume
are
Wrong verb form
were
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France
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France's
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 highest
expenditure
 in 2010.
UK
's
cars
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car
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expenditure
 number, which is 450,000
Pound
 sterling, is 12.5% higher than
France
's.
In addition
 to that,
UK's
Correct article usage
the UK's
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 books
expenditure
 is 100,000
Pound
 sterling higher than
France
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France's
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 with only 300,000
Pound
 sterling. It
also
 happened in Cameras
expenditure
 with
UK
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the UK
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 being more than twice higher than
France
's number. In
contrary
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contrast
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,
France
's
computers
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computer
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 spending is slightly higher than
Correct article usage
the UK
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UK
Change noun form
UK's
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 with
25,000
Correct article usage
a 25,000
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Pound
 sterling difference.
Moreover
,
France
's Perfume
spendings
Fix the agreement mistake
spending
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 is 25% higher than
UK
's with only less than 150,000
Pound
 sterling.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, uk, france, pound with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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