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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart displays the
expenditure
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 of two European countries on five types of consumer goods in 2010.
Overall
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, cars, books, and cameras became
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UK's
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the UK's
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 biggest spending in 2010. Meanwhile, computers and perfume
are
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were
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France
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France's
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 highest
expenditure
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 in 2010.
UK
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's
cars
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car
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expenditure
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 number, which is 450,000
Pound
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 sterling, is 12.5% higher than
France
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's.
In addition
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 to that,
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UK's
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the UK's
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 books
expenditure
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 is 100,000
Pound
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 sterling higher than
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France
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France's
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 with only 300,000
Pound
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 sterling. It
also
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 happened in Cameras
expenditure
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 with
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UK
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the UK
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 being more than twice higher than
France
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's number. In
contrary
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contrast
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,
France
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's
computers
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computer
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 spending is slightly higher than
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the UK
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UK
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UK's
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 with
25,000
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a 25,000
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Pound
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 sterling difference.
Moreover
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,
France
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's Perfume
spendings
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spending
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 is 25% higher than
UK
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's with only less than 150,000
Pound
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 sterling.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, uk, france, pound with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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