Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to defile? What factors are important in achieving happiness ?

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could hardly be overestimated.
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, it is not so easy to define, as for some
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it can be measured in money,
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others in hours of quality time with the family.
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is a feeling, and
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are very hard to
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classify. Every person has its own vision of what
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is. As all
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are different, it is very hard to figure out what are the proper
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be.
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with the same salary may not have the same
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of
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people
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with the different
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may feel equally happy. Some studies about
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suggested
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on several parameters to compare the
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of
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among the different individuals. The first parameter is
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level
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of
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. The study claims, that without food
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and physical
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security
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cannot be happy. The
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security
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needs should be provided to the
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to be happy.
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, the feeling of social
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plays
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role as well.
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, in the
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level
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is defined, where the crime
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is low, and
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are feel
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that government support their basic needs. The second parameter that was taken under
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was working-life balance.
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, who were working regular hours and
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several hours a day with their families reported high
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level
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of
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. No doubt, that they get enough money to support an
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life, but their
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high.
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life and
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the feeling of
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happines
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.
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each person has individual
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to indicate
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as
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of
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and balance between
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work and the family.
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Using specific parameters like security and work-life balance to define happiness shows insightful thinking and helps in providing a detailed response.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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