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One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him at the airport on time. Write a letter asking him to wait for you at the airport and tell him how to identify you.

#pen #pals #city #airport #time
Dear Mr Johnson, I am writing
this
 letter about your proposed visit to Kent. You
had
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told me that you
will
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would
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 be travelling by Singapore
airlines
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Airlines
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 flight no 002450 on Thursday 25th July 2024. The flight will arrive at 10.30 am. I am sorry to let you know that I will not be available at the airport
on
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at
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 10.30am to meet you. As I will be attending
conference
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a conference
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 organised by my employer. The conference will end
on
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at
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 11.30 am.So you have to wait for me till
a
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an
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 hour.
In addition
 to that, how will you recognise me? I am sending you my Mobile
number
 and
passport size
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 photo of mine. You need to call me on arrival. please save my
number
in
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on
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 your mobile, and please call me on the
number
 before arriving so that I can save your
number
 too. You can send me your latest photo so that I can recognise you. Hope to meet you soon and will enjoy your company too.
Your
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Yours
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 sincerely, Jay McMillan
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Single Idea per Paragraph
You've provided a lot of good information in your letter, but ensure each paragraph covers one main idea. This makes your writing easier to follow.
Complete Response
Your letter addresses the main points effectively, but consider adding a specific place at the airport where your pen pal can wait for you.
Additional Advice
A quick review of your grammar and punctuation could make your letter even stronger. For example, 'so you have to wait for me till a hour.' should be 'so you have to wait for me for an hour.'
Suitable Writing Tone
You have an appropriate tone throughout the letter, which suits the context well.
Greeting and Closing
Your greeting and closing are suitable and polite.
Logical Structure
The letter's logical flow is well-maintained, making it easy to follow your points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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