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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The graph introduces the count of shops shut down and the
number
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 of shuttles that opened in the country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the report, displays the
number
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 of closings fluctuates every
year
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, and till the
year
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 of 2018, it fell to around 1500 compared to 2011.
Similarly
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, the
number
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 of openings decreased by 6500. At the beginning of the report, the digit of the opening is much higher in comparison to the closures and
that is
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 2000. In the next
year
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, it took a downward moment but, later in the next two consecutive years, it reached the sky. Surprisingly, In 2015 it drastically decreased the
number
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 of down-shuttles by 6000 units, but in the section of aperture, it is not bearish as compared to the dismissals. After a
year
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, it took a peak of closing and remained constant in the
year
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 2018.
Whereas
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, the calculation of a new one is slightly downwards. At the report ends, it displays that both sectors have lower digits as compared to first-
year
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 data.
To conclude
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, both sections have variations in numerical by every
year
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. As per the data, openers are much more varied than road-off
centers
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centres
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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