In some countries, parents prefer to teach children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of homeschooling outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some nations believe, that schools are not the most efficient way to teach their kids, so they teach them by themselves. I think
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is a better way to let young
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study
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a lot
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, schools
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have their upsides in
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system. Nowadays, parents prefer to teach their children at
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way, children can always be in contact with their family and
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feel support from them, if they struggle at some point.
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parents can pay more attention to their "student", which is more reliable than having 20-30 students
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class.
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study
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allows for a healthier
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-life balance, more suited to modern living. I believe,
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method is actually more reliable, just because
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type of education is very secure and individual, which means, students are going to feel better during classes rather than in
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and some major
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problems,
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as vaping, bullying
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etc., will be easier to deal with.
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, there are some factors, that keep many parents away from
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-education.
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of them is the fact, that
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actually doesn'
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just tell students to
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, learn
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and other stuff. Schools actually boost young
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's communication skills,
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and logics
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logics
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and
trains
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their brains with
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amount of information,
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home
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studying doesn'
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guarantee you these vital abilities in life.
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,
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studying at
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, you don'
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actually interact with anyone,
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your teacher and family,
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in
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, you are always among
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just like you, with different thoughts and opinions. I guess, discussing
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literally anything with these
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types
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of
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can help you discover something new too.
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, there are some major advantages and disadvantages
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topic. I can'
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really tell which of these two
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outweighs
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other
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one
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. Children can be under
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massive control. And every student has their opinion on it. Someone would love it, someone would hate it. It's just practically impossible to find
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particular method that would motivate every kid to
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. I would predict that controversy about
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education will still exist after several centuries.
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Continue to focus on summarizing main ideas in the conclusion but try to provide a clearer stance or a more definitive opinion in the conclusion part.
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Good attempt at addressing both the advantages and disadvantages of homeschooling and traditional schooling.
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in making your response more comprehensive.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Homeschooling
  • Tailored educational approaches
  • One-on-One Attention
  • Safe Learning Environment
  • Cost-Effective
  • Family Bonding
  • Limited Socialization
  • Potential Knowledge Gaps
  • Regulatory Challenges
  • Dependence on Parental Commitment
  • Limited Extracurricular Opportunities
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