IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum.” Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter • explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum • describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful • give details of when you would be available for work

#museum #home #people #work #director #skills #qualities
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request for a part-time job in your museum. I am a student at a college near the museum, I have moved here recently and I need some activities for my free time. I am interested in art and history and would like to spend my time there. As I had been working in the library during
my
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
high school, I have communication skills to deal with various people.
Also
, I have read lots of books about historical places, I suppose I will be able
use
Add the particle
to use
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
my knowledge in a museum. I would cooperate with you at every time possible for me,
for example
, I will be free at weekends and every evening during the weekdays. please let me know if you require any
further
 information. Yours faithfully, Ostore Hassani
Submitted by ostorr7213 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
To improve your letter, consider organizing it into clear paragraphs: one for the introduction, one for explaining your motivation, one for your skills, and one for your availability. This will enhance the logical structure and make it easier to read.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single idea that supports your overall request. This can help to improve the clarity and focus of your writing.
task achievement
Your letter provides a clear response to the task, explaining your motivation, relevant skills, and availability. This is well done and ensures the reader understands why you are a suitable candidate.
task achievement
Your tone is polite and appropriate for a formal letter, which demonstrates an understanding of the suitable writing tone for this type of correspondence.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Volunteer
  • Part-time
  • Unpaid work
  • Museum director
  • Skills and qualities
  • Customer service
  • Organization
  • Team player
  • Flexible
  • Reliable
  • Positive attitude
  • Availability
  • Professional goals
  • Community contribution
  • References
What to do next:
Look at other essays: