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Many people say that human society has developed into a throw-away society, which is filled with plastic bags and rubbish. What are the causes and solutions?

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A lot of individuals argue that modern society is becoming wasteful and is being built by
plastics
. The main problem
this
 causes is new
technology
 and the most viable solution is recycling. The main cause associated with a throw-away society is the development of
technology
. As we know, the contemporary world is in constant progress and one of the key areas that drives
this
 progress is
technology
. The creation of new automation plays a crucial role in the increase of consumption
ofplastic
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of plastic
 bags.
Plastics
 are used in packaging, cosmetics and in other our daily routines.
However
,
plastic
 is made from polyethylene which takes 200 years to decompose.
For
this
 reason, they pollute our environment: water sources, oceans and so on.
For example
, Japan takes
the
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first place
on
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 improving
technology
. They use 5 million tons of
plastics
 in a year. The recycling of
plastics
 and rubbish is the best solution to tackle
this
 issue. As I mentioned in the previous paragraph, the process of destroying
plastic
 bags takes a long time. People can give
plastic
 a second chance by recycling it. Recycled
plastic
 can be used in the preparation of furniture, clothes and other goods. European countries are vivid examples
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 others. Residents of these countries donate
plastic
 in stores and receive bonuses for it.
To sum up
, filling with
plastic
 bags and rubbish is a result of developing
technology
,
however
, it can be addressed by recycling
plastics
.
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The essay provides specific examples, such as Japan's use of plastic, to support its points.
coherence cohesion
Both the introduction and conclusion are present, effectively framing the essay.

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