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Topic: The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

Topic: The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
#topic #development #village #ryemouth
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The supplied
map
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 illustrates how many changes have occurred in Ryemouth
village
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among
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between
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 1995 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
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; a number of dramatic developments take place which alter the layout of the
village
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 completely within the period. It is clearly shown that the
north
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northern
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 part of the
village
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undergoes
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is undergoing
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 significant changes. Both farmland and forest park are replaced by the golf and tennis court in the
north east
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northeast
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 of the
map
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.
Furthermore
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, housing in the
north west
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northwest
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 of the Ryemouth
are
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is
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 extended.
According to
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 the maps, the south of the
village
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 has some tangible transformation.
While
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 the hotel in the
south east
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southeast
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 of the
map
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 remains flat, the car park is established next to it.
In addition
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, the shops are replaced by
restaurant
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restaurants
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in
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on
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 the left side of the hotel.
Although
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 the café remains in the same location, the shops are
knock
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knocked
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 down to make way for the restaurant in the
south west
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southwest
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 of the
village
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.
Finally
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, the fish market which
were
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was
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 in front of the shops
are
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was
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 converted
to
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into
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the
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apply
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apartments, and the fishing port in the south of the
map
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are
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was
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 demolished.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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