Topic: The map below shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present.

Topic: The map below shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present.
The supplied
map
illustrates a plethora of changes
have
Correct pronoun usage
that have
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occurred in Rye
mouth
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Mouth
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village
between 1995 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
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.
Overall
; a number of dramatic developments take place which alter the layout of the
village
completely within the period. It is clearly shown that the northern part of the
village
undergoes
Wrong verb form
is undergoing
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significant changes. Both farmland and forest park are replaced by the golf and tennis court in the northeast of the
map
.
Furthermore
, housing in the northwest of the Rye mouth is extended.
According to
the maps, the south of the
village
has a number of tangible transformations.
While
the hotel in the southeast of the
map
remains flat, the car park is established next to it.
In addition
, the shops are replaced by restaurants
in
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on
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the left side of the hotel.
Although
the café remains in the same location, the shops are
knock
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knocked
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down to make way for the restaurant in the southwest of the
village
.
Finally
, the fish market which
were
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was
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in front of the shops
are
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was
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converted into
the
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apply
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apartments, and the fishing port in the south of the
map
was demolished.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, village with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.

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