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The chart below show the result of a survey of adult education. The fist chart shows the reasons why adult decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information show below.

The chart below show the result of a survey of adult education. The fist chart shows the reasons why adult decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information show below.
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The chart illustrates the adult survey of
education
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. The first bar chart describes
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reason
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the reason
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 for adult
education
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 and there are seven reasons behind
this
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. The second chart shows how they pay
their
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for their
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education's
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education
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cost
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costs
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 interest in
subject
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the subject
a subject
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 is the main
reason
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 for studying and the majority of learners pay their
education
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 fees by themselves. In detail, two-fifths of
adults
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adults'
adult's
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reason
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 for staying is interest in
subject
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the subject
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 and to gain qualification is the second
popular
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most popular
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 cause for
education
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 at 38. Helpful for their current job is only for 22 but to improve prospects of promotion and enjoy learning have the same amount of
reason
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, which is accounted for a fifth. To
able
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 to change
job
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jobs
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 and to meet people are the least causes for
education
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, which
is
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are
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 12 and 9 respectively.
Furthermore
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, the majority of the learners pay their course cost by themselves than
tax payer
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taxpayer
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, which is accounted for two-fifths and a quarter respectively. Employer share adult's
education
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 fees
is
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are
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 just above a quarter.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • respondents
  • motivation
  • percentage
  • cost distribution
  • financial responsibility
  • education funding
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • data
  • subsidize
  • self-improvement
  • career advancement
  • personal interest
  • allocate
  • tuition
  • public funding
  • private investment
  • retraining
  • lifelong learning
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