The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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The line graph depicts the population percentage aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in

Japan

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Swedan

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Sweden

, and

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USA

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the USA

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Overall

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, The rate of population of

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USA

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the USA

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began as the leading one compared to

Japan

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but

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the end reversal

happend

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happened

.The

Swedan

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Swedish

volume started in the middle between the other two countries

except

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except for

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two centuries before remained essentially the same throughout the periods. Figure showing the least population in

the

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apply

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Japan

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was about 5% and the leading one in the

USA

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was 9% in 1940. Afterwards,

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USA

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the USA

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displayed

consistent

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a consistent

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increase

upto

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up to

15% until 1980 and

then

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steadily maintained before

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it roseup

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roseup

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rose up

(23%) from 2020 to 2024.

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Japan

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shown

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showed

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hover changes till 2000 and significantly

increased

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apply

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doubled the count

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by 10

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% in 2030 by

outpaced

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outpacing

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the

USA

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which

then

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suddenly

soar

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soared

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upto

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up to

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28% in 2040 by overcoming the two countries

reached

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to reach

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the leading position.

Swedan

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Sweden

volume rate gradually increased from 7% to 20% between 1940 to 2010

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apply

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exceeding the

USA

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in 1990.

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at the end

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period

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the period

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(2040)

further

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increased

upto

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up to

26% with a small dip(18%) in 2030.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, usa with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

178 words

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