The table above shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the information and making comparisons where relevant.

The table above shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the information and making comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentage of people using
phones
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for different purposes in 2006, 2008 and 2010.
Overall
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, making calls had been the most common way of using
phones
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throughout the examined periods.
While
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the use of
phones
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for calls declined slightly, people seemed to start using
phones
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to search the Internet and record videos and rely on them for other reasons as well. Starting with the dominant ways of using mobiles, making calls was the most significant in all three periods of time.
While
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there was a minor drop in 2010, everyone used
phones
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for calls in 2006 and 2008.
Secondly
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, sending and receiving text messages was another important way with the gradual increase with all the figures accounting for over 70%.
Similarly
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, taking
phones
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and searching the Internet were
also
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becoming more popular as they were both slightly behind in exchanging text messages. Indeed, there was no data available regarding the use of the Internet in 2006. Turning to the categories with minor uses, playing games shared less than half
whereas
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it experienced a huge increase from 2006 to 2008 with 17% and 42% respectively. Even though playing music remained comparatively lower, it jumped from 12% in 2006 to 26% in 2010.
Furthermore
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, there was no use of
phones
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as a way to record videos in 2006 but its popularity suddenly rose from 9% in 2008 to 35% in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words phones with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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