The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the expansion of a museum between 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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, developments were made in many areas
although
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garden and entrance locations remained unchanged. In general comparison, the 21st-century model was more packed than the 19th century.
Initially
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, in 1998, the ticket location as an entrance and exit gate were in one straight hallway with the greenhouse and cafeteria. It is
also
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located between the temporary
exhibition
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room and the fashion area with a restroom. The greenhouse and cafeteria were surrounded by the permanent
exhibition
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area.
However
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, a decade later, the building had developed and relocated some of its functional rooms. The developer built a restaurant on the top left corner of the museum side-by-side with the coffee shop followed by male and female toilets. The garden park, which is still located in the same place, had ameliorated with fountains and shared some of its areas for the coffee shop sitting area.
Although
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the right side of the permanent
exhibition
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room was expanded, the left side of it was demolished and used for a new temporary
exhibition
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room.
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, the bags and coats
as well as
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the shop moved to the down left corner of the building.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words exhibition with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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