Some people say that older people should live with their adult children, while others think they should live in homes specially built for old people. Which do you think is a better practice?
In
this
modern era, Linking Words
people
have been splitting their responsibilities than ever before. Some Use synonyms
people
believe that senior citizens should stay with their family Use synonyms
members
Use synonyms
while
others think that they should stay in old Linking Words
age
homes. I think pension Use synonyms
houses
are a satisfactory process for mature Use synonyms
parents
because they acquire medical facilities Use synonyms
along with
reduced Linking Words
loneliness
. Use synonyms
This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
Linking Words
To begin
with, old Linking Words
age
homes are Use synonyms
the
better place for senior citizens than staying with their family Correct article usage
a
members
because mature Use synonyms
parents
should require medical attention Use synonyms
due to
elderly diseases. But in Linking Words
this
fast-paced era, Linking Words
people
do not have more time to nurse their Use synonyms
parents
, so numerous Use synonyms
elder
Correct your spelling
eldercare
care
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
centers
are established around the nations Change the spelling
centres
with
providing Change preposition
apply
the
ultra-modern medical facilities to take Correct article usage
apply
care
Use synonyms
the
older generations. Change preposition
of the
For example
, many Indians are settled in foreign nations because of their career perspectives but they Linking Words
sent
their Wrong verb form
send
parents
Use synonyms
in
elder Change preposition
to
care
Use synonyms
centers
Use synonyms
where
provide ultra-modern medical and accommodation facilities. Correct word choice
that
This
means they Linking Words
not
neglect their responsibility Change the verb form
do not
did not
instead
Linking Words
of
they protect their Correct word choice
apply
parents
.
Use synonyms
Furthermore
, senior Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
should
need Verb problem
apply
accompany
in their Correct your spelling
company
elder
Correct your spelling
older
age
but their family Use synonyms
members
are busy Use synonyms
to earn
money. Change the verb form
earning
This
means old-Linking Words
age
Use synonyms
houses
provide the environment for reduced Use synonyms
loneliness
with the same-Use synonyms
age
Use synonyms
people
. Use synonyms
For instance
, old-Linking Words
age
Use synonyms
houses
conduct numerous games and play sessions Use synonyms
for reducing
Change preposition
to reduce
loneliness
and missing family Use synonyms
members
. Needless to say, pension Use synonyms
houses
are Use synonyms
the
better place Correct article usage
a
to
senior citizens Change preposition
for
live
than adults.
Fix the infinitive
to live
To conclude
, elder Linking Words
care
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
centers
provide eye-to-eye medical attention to Change the spelling
centres
old
Correct article usage
the old
age
population Use synonyms
as well as
Linking Words
it
reduces Correct pronoun usage
apply
loneliness
and gives a chance to meet the same Use synonyms
age
individuals under one umbrella. Use synonyms
Therefore
, I think elder Linking Words
care
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
centers
are the better place to live Change the spelling
centres
senior
Fix the agreement mistake
seniors
people
.Use synonyms
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