Culture around the world has become more similar to the other countries then it was before. State reasons, example and conclude if it is a positive or negative trend?
Cultures
around the world have evolved and each country has their own uniqueness. Unfortunately, cultures
between countries have now become similar to each other. Hence
, in this
essay, I will discuss why this
may give false information and for some reasons that are set out below.
To begin
with, every country in the world is special in their own way. These specialties
are expressed in the form of Change the spelling
specialities
culture
. In addition
, culture
itself can be divided into many areas such
as national dishes, language, national monuments and traditional clothings
. In fact, Change the wording
clothing
items of clothing
articles of clothing
Merlion
Statue has become Singapore's national statue and Correct article usage
the Merlion
also
Batik as
a traditional clothing Correct your spelling
is
for
Change preposition
in
Indonesia
. Therefore
, culture
has become a main feature for each country to provide popularity and attraction for tourists to visit.
However
, in some cases, culture
between countries get mixed up Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
due to
similarity
. Fix the agreement mistake
similarities
For example
, Indonesia
and Malaysia have many in common such
as the language used. Both Bahasa Indonesia
and Bahasa Melayu were similar. On the other hand
, There was a moment when Malaysia claimed the song “Halo Bandung” and the dish “Nasi Goreng” to be a part of their culture
and originated from Malaysia. That is
to say, both “Halo Bandung” and “Nasi Goreng” were actually from Indonesia
. Despite this
case, cultures
do not have any patents. Hence
, the relation
between Replace the word
relationship
culture
and its similarity with other countries can be confusing and may create false information for tourists.
To conclude
, without any patent, cultures
around the world can be mixed up and similar to one another.Submitted by kelly on
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task achievement
In the introduction, clearly state whether you believe the increasing similarity of cultures is a positive or negative trend. Your current stance is not explicitly clear.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. The essay's flow can be improved for better readability.
task achievement
Expand on the reasons and examples given. Providing more detail and a wider range of examples would strengthen your argument.
task achievement
The essay features some relevant examples, such as the Merlion Statue and Batik.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay is appropriately divided into paragraphs, with a clear beginning, middle, and end.