The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
line
graph
shows a variation of
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
number
of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
museum
visitor
Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
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, including
Louvre
Correct article usage
the Louvre
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, Vatican, Shenzen, and
London
Science
Museum
from 1980 up to 2015.
First,
Louvre
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the Louvre
show examples
had the
most
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apply
show examples
highest
number
of
Visitor
Fix the agreement mistake
Visitors
show examples
around 8.
it
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It
show examples
also
had a huge
increasment
Correct your spelling
increase
after 15 years
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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reached
Wrong verb form
reaching
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around 9 on the
line
graph
.
Beside
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Besides
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, it
also
have
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has
show examples
a little
decreasment
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decrease
around 8,2 5 years after the
increasment
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increase
increased
.
Louvre
museum
had
rise
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risen
show examples
an increase on the
line
graph
15 years after that
reched
Correct your spelling
reached
around 8,9.
In contrast
,
London
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the London
show examples
Science
museum
Capitalize word
Museum
show examples
experienced a
fluantiol
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flaunting
and
manufactoring
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manufacturing
to
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apply
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decline.
London
Science
Museum
gained a 4 in the
number
of the
line
graph
in 1980. In 2015,
London
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the London
show examples
Science
museum
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Museum
show examples
had a
hilariaus
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hilarious
drop to 2, which made
this
museum
had
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have
show examples
the lowest
number
of
visitor
Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
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compared with three other
museum
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museums
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.
Secondly
,
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Vatican
Vaticant
Correct article usage
the Vaticant
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museum
Capitalize word
Museum
show examples
had
dominate
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dominated
show examples
the
number
of
visitor
Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
show examples
beside
Correct article usage
the louvre
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louvre
Capitalize word
Louvre
show examples
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, graph, number, museum, visitor, louvre, london, science with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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