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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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graph
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 shows a variation of
a
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the
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number
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 of
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apply
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museum
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visitor
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visitors
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, including
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Louvre
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the Louvre
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, Vatican, Shenzen, and
London
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Science
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Museum
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 from 1980 up to 2015.
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Louvre
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the Louvre
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 had the
most
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highest
number
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 of
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Visitor
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Visitors
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 around 8.
it
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also
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 had a huge
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increase
 after 15 years
that
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apply
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reached
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reaching
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 around 9 on the
line
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graph
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.
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, it
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have
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 a little
decreasment
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decrease
 around 8,2 5 years after the
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increase
increased
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Louvre
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museum
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 had
rise
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 an increase on the
line
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graph
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 15 years after that
reched
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reached
 around 8,9.
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London
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the London
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museum
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 experienced a
fluantiol
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flaunting
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manufactoring
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manufacturing
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decline.
London
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Science
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Museum
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 gained a 4 in the
number
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 of the
line
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graph
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 in 1980. In 2015,
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London
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the London
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Science
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museum
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 had a
hilariaus
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hilarious
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museum
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had
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 the lowest
number
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 of
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visitor
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visitors
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 compared with three other
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museum
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museums
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.
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,
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Vatican
Vaticant
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the Vaticant
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museum
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 had
dominate
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 the
number
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 of
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visitor
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visitors
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 beside
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the louvre
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louvre
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Louvre
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, graph, number, museum, visitor, louvre, london, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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