The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams above display the
reasons
behind people's choice in their modes of
transportations
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transportation
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to travel to work. Categorized into these
two
pie charts are
reasons
to ride
bicycle
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and car. Making up more than 50% of the data, most people who bike to their office list health and environmental concerns as their main
reasons
. Affordability and efficiency are
also
considered
as
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important, divided into
two
major points
of
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having to pay next to nothing for parking services and less traffic, meaning
lesser
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less
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time spent riding in comparison to driving.
In contrast
to cycling, people who choose to drive their cars do so
by
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the reason of comfort.
Following
this
, the distance to their working place played a second big role
for
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their decisions
in driving
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to drive
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. Interestingly, just like the previous group, they
also
think their preferred
vehice
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vehicle
is faster than the
other's
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. The other
two
reasons
are regarding the amount of stuff they need to bring and safety
issue
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issues
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. In conclusion, these
two
groups share
similarity
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in their concerns
of
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speed, perceiving their chosen mode of transportation can
be
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more efficient. Meanwhile, their main concerns differ from each other in a contrasting way: the first on health, and the latter on comfort.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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