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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant
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The line graph depicts how many kinds of three different crimes namely Burglary,
Car
theft
 and
Robbery
 appeared in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
,
car
theft
 and
robbery
 stayed almost unchanged during the year,
whereas
 Burglary decreased.
In addition
, the
number
 of
incidents
 that occurred in
car
Theft
 was higher than
Robbery
. The 2003-2012 period experienced a stay in the
number
 of
incidents
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Robbery
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 over 500. Opposed to
Car
theft
, the
number
 of
incidents
 that occurred in
car
Theft
 decreased slightly from over 2500 to about 2000 between 2003 and 2006.
However
,
this
 figure witnessed
a
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leverage from about 2500 to 2012. Between 2003 and 2008, there was a significant fall in the
number
 of
incidents
 by Burglary from 3500 to around 1200
then
 it witnessed a remained stable of around 1500 during the following 7 years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, theft, robbery, number, incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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