The chart below shows fruit sales in a supermarket for three different months after an advertising campaign to promote sales of peaches, pears and strawberries.
The given chart illustrates sales of fruits in a market
during
three months after an Change preposition
for
advertisment
campaign to enhance sales.
Correct your spelling
advertisement
advertising
Overall
, it is clear that
the top-ranked food were
peaches, meanwhile, Correct subject-verb agreement
was
cherries
had the lowest results. In addition
, the product which did not have a significant improvement was pear at that period of the time.
Firstly
, in January, cherries
and strawberries had equal results by
demonstrating 4 kilograms and melons showed 8, in the meantime, apples had 28 and pears had 16. Change preposition
apply
Nevertheless
, in May, cherries
depicted a slight decrease to 2, meanwhile, melonswent
down dramatically to 2,5 and apples had a huge reduction to 24. Correct your spelling
melons went
Hence
, other fruits such
as strawberries had a dramatic rise to 12, while
peaches had a dramatic growth to 24.
Secondly
, in October, cherries
declined steadily to 1, meanwhile, melons grew up to 6. Despite this
, strawberries overtook them by approximately 15 kilograms, however
, this
number is smaller than 18 which had pears.Apples had only 26, meanwhile, peaches received 27 which is the best result among the others.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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