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– Take a look at the chart below and perform the task as outlined: This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

– Take a look at the chart below and perform the task as outlined: This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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 line graph illustrates the percentage of four recycled materials during a
28 year
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 period in a specific country. It is notable that the recycling rate of glass containers,
aluminum
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 cans, and plastics showed an upward trend between 1982 and 2010. As for the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of paper and cardboard fluctuated during the period. The
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percent
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 of paper and cardboard materials that ranked top in 1982
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 rose and fell in the following eight years. In 1994, it experienced dramatic growth to 80
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percent
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 and steadily dropped to 70
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percent
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 as of 2010.
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, after all the variety, it still
taken
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 the biggest part among all materials. The second place is glass containers; the line for
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 genre is
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 inconsistent. It declined from 50
percent
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 to 40
percent
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 from 1982 to 1990, and continuously increased to 60
percent
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 in the end. As for aluminium cans, it surged to 45
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percent
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per cent
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 within the
28 year
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 period from 5% in
the
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1982. Plastics in
the
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last
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 place steadily and slightly
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 to 9
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percent
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 in 2010.
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