The use of mobile phones has increased rapidly in the twenty-first century. Additionally, cell phones can now be used for many purposes besides making phone calls. What are the advantages and disadvantages of cell phones?
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the usage
smartphones
has dramatically increased and people
can do various things thanks to them. This
essay believes that the primary benefit is related to the functionality of this
device, while
the main drawback is connected with the addiction that we have.
On the one hand, mobile phones have a beneficial impact on our life
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lives
due to
the fact
that we are able to communicate with each other and use numerous apps for our needs. People
can easily find useful information thanks to the
cell phones, download some apps that need for work, use a lot of apps connected with video and audio and watch films and series. Correct article usage
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According to
some articles, a large number of people
consider smartphones
to be the most significant technology due to
the fact
that it has a
numerous useful functions.
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On the other hand
, these electronic devices may have a detrimental effect on people
. Some individuals experience challenges with smartphones
that can result in an addiction. They cannot live without a phone and it is considered to be hard to let it go. Also
, it can have a negative impact on health that is
connected with the eyes due to
the fact
that people
watch on a screen for a long period of time. According to
some psychological research, for 80% of respondents
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respondents,
daily
routine without a phone and another 20% of them Correct article usage
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eyes
disease.
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becoming more and more addicted to cell phones Change the verb form
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due to
the fact
that it incorporates numerous useful things from calls to work related
issues. Add a hyphen
work-related
This
essay considers smartphones
to be an integral part of our life that can be used in a
various ways, Correct the article-noun agreement
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however
, there are some challenges related to mental and physical diseases.Submitted by sofina.elena2014 on
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