The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon
The flow chart illustrates the development of a species of large fist called the
selmon
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Selmon
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from
egg
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the egg
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during its life
cycle
.
Overall
it is clear that
there are three distinct
stage
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stages
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illustrated in the process commencing with producing
eggs
in the water and ending with
development
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the development
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of mature salmon. The first stage is when the
eggs
are
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hidden
hiden
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hidden
under reeds and small stones in the upper river for approx 5-6
month
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after the
eggs
hatched
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they will be called fry
that is
3-8 cm the next step
after
this
is that the fry will go to the lower river and stay there for approx 4 years until they grow up
then
thy will be called smolt
that is
12-15 cm after that they will move to the open sea at
this
point in the
cycle
they will become an adult salmon
that is
70-76 cm and the final stage of the
cycle
is when the adult salmon go back to the lower river in order to lay
eggs
having completed all these steps the life
cycle
will
then
begin again
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