The diagram below show the lifecyle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

The diagram below show the lifecyle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
The flow chart illustrates the development of a species of large fish called the salmon from
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during its life cycle.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are three distinct stages illustrated in the process, commencing with producing eggs in the water and ending with
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of mature The first
stage
is when the eggs which are laid in the upper river with
slow moving
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water hatch after approximately 5-6 months. At
this
stage
, small fish which is called fries emerge, and they are around 3-8 cm long. They eventually move to
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river, and they stay there for approximately four years.
This
average-size fish is called smolts, and they are around 12-15cm. The next
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after
this
is when they move to
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sea and stay there for approximately five years. During
this
stage
, they gradually turn into adult salmon with around 70-76cm. The final
stage
is when the adult salmon go back to the upper river to lay eggs. Having completed these steps, the life cycle will
then
begin again.
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