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The pie chart below shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during 1990s. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during 1990s. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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Land degradation is when the value of
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land decreases by losing
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 ability to produce food and
nutritions
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. The chart
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 the reasons that contributed to it ,
While
 there are various factors , we will focus on the 3 main reasons , which are deforestation ,
over-gazing
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, And over-cultivation . including the
precentage
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percentage
 that
have
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 been caused in some regions
such
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states
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, Europe , And Oceania .
Overall
 , we can see that the major contribution is
the
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over-gazing
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, which
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 been mostly caused by
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,
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 Europe had a larger impact
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the
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deforestation
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 to the United States . First of all , these three
contries
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countries
 combined
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 41% of the causes that
genarated
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generated
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 the global problem .
however
 , Europe has a
precentage
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percentage
 of 23%, which
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over-cultivation ,
this
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in
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 the ecosystem
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because a ton of species rely on the benefits of
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argicultural
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agricultural
 land . as opposed to Oceania which did not
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generate
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 regarding
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over-cultivation.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • agricultural land
  • less productive
  • over-grazing
  • deforestation
  • over-cultivation
  • minor causes
  • regional impact
  • percentage affected
  • comparative analysis
  • detrimental
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