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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram explains the process for the making of chocolate.There are a total of ten stages in the process, beginning with the growing of the pods on the cacao trees and culminating in the production of the chocolate.
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cocoa comes from the cacao tree, which is grown in the South American and African continents and the country of Indonesia. Once the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested and the white cocoa beans are removed. Following a period of fermentation, they are
then
 laid out on a large tray so they can dry under the sun.Next,they are placed into large sacks and delivered to the factory. They are
then
 roasted at a temperature of 350 degrees, after which the beans are crushed and separated from their outer shell. In the final stage,
this
 inner part
that is
 left is pressed and the chocolate is produced.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion to frame the information effectively.
coherence cohesion
Work on logically connecting all stages of the process more smoothly.
task achievement
Ensure that all of the stages are thoroughly explained and relevant specific examples are included where necessary.
task achievement
The essay covers all stages of the chocolate production process.
task achievement
The main points are supported with relevant information on the process of making chocolate.

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