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More and more people are now working remotely from home. Is this a positive and negative development?

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It is seen that with the advancement of technology,
mostly
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 men and women prefer to do online
jobs
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 a positive development for humans as they have less
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 and help to save
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environmentel
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environmental
environment
 resources. People who prefer to do
jobs
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 from home have less
stress
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 in their life.
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 is because they do not need to worry about the traffic in the peak hours
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 they can save travelling time and invest that time in
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 activities and looking after their kids.
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, in mostly developed countries it has been seen that both parents are working and they have less time to spend with their families.
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, remote
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 ease the lifestyle of people without any
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 and lead
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happy
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 life. Another
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 has less impact on the environment as people stay at home and use less transport which not only reduces pollution
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 saves surroundings
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resources
 to
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deplete
. To explain it, if humans prefer to do
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 from home
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 of going to the office daily
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 the environment can be saved from polluted vehicles that are used by them to commute from one place to another.
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, a survey has been conducted by United Kingdom National Services which reveals that with remote
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 less pollution is recorded in the country.
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, it helps save the atmosphere from harmful
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 gases. In conclusion, with remote
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 humans do have less
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 and they
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 put effort into saving their surroundings.
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grammar
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content
Some ideas, especially in the second main paragraph, could be developed further for greater clarity. More detailed examples and explanations would strengthen your points.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion well.
content
Main points are generally well-supported with relevant examples.
task response
The topic is addressed comprehensively, considering both benefits and drawbacks.

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