Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Pollution
is a serious global problem although
that which is caused by traffic is one which can be tackled. I would agree that the primary way of doing this
would be to invest in the public transport
infrastructure. However
, there are also
other ways.
People
need to commute in order to travel to work; and
many Change the punctuation
, and
;
people
choose to travel to work in private cars
which cause
gridlock in many cities twice a day, and which Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
also
give
rise to more serious problems. The fumes from these Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
cars
cause air pollution
, resulting in poor quality, harmful air in our cities. These fumes are also
a major contributor to global warming. If people
used public transport
instead
of driving then
this
problem would be dramatically reduced.
Cost and convenience are big factors in people
’s choice of transport
. For
this
reason
governments need to invest money to ensure that they have a Add a comma
reason,
transport
system which is more effective than private car ownership. This
means that the system is reliable and is capable of transporting large numbers of people
around the city cheaply and quickly. An example of a well developed
system is in Tokyo where millions of Add a hyphen
well-developed
people
rely on public transport
rather than driving themselves.
An alternative solution to the problem is to encourage the use of electric cars
. We already have the technology to produce electric cars
which do not produce any fumes so do not result in air pollution
. However
, these cars
are not as popular at present. The government could change this
by subsidizing car ownership through perhaps offering tax deductions when purchasing the cars
. They could also
offer free parking in city centres for electric cars
.
In conclusion, public investment in subsidized public transport
infrastructure is certainly vital in order to tackle pollution
. However
there are Add a comma
However,
also
some other alternatives with regards to cleaner technology.Submitted by jolo9419jmor on
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