The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products.

The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products.
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The diagram demonstrates the
process
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by which
pineapples
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are grown and prepared to become products. First of all, pineapple bushes are grown
seperately
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separately
with 26
centimeter
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26-centimetre
gap between each bush. The temperature is maintained around 23-30 degrees Celsius for
pineapples
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to grow properly. After growing for 7 months, these bushes are sprayed with
ethaline
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ethylene
saline
.
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, these pineapple bushes continue growing for 5 months until the
pineapples
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’ length and weight are 30
centimeters
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and 2 kilograms respectively. The
process
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continues with
pineapples
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are
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carefully washed to prepare for the next
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.
Then
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,
pineapples
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are sorted based on their size.
First,
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having cut the heads, the smallest
pineapples
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are peeled to put in the extractor where the juice is extracted. In another
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, bigger
pineapples
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have their head cut, and these
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are chopped in half.
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, they are sliced into smaller chunks and canned.
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, covered with wax, the largest
pineapples
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are put in boxes for exportation.
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