Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.

Thank you, I learned a new word today ( Avid ) tea is my favorite morning hunger healer
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if I
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to take it on time, my body will definitely start weakening. And I prefer taking it once per day.
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a cup of ☕ coffee
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which I learned it's useful to me in that it heals
headache
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headaches
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and
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off sleepy moods and I usually
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it whenever I'm feeling
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headache or sleepy at an intended time.
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introduction conclusion
Create a clear introduction to present the topic and your opinion right from the beginning. Conclude with a summary and restatement of your opinion.
logical structure
Improve the logical flow by connecting ideas smoothly using transition words and phrases. Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
supported main points
Expand on your points with relevant details and examples that support your main ideas. This will demonstrate a deeper understanding and provide more comprehensive answers.
complete response
Ensure your essay fully addresses both views mentioned in the topic and provides a clear opinion on the matter.
personal engagement
Your essay has a personal touch and shows your engagement with the topic. You mention practical uses of tea and coffee in your daily life, showcasing personal relevance.
sentence variety
You use variety in sentence structure, which makes the text more engaging to read. This shows a good grasp of English.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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