The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its

development.
The maps below depict the current layout of
central
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area of Islip, a small town and proposed development plans for the future.
It is clear that
the residential and recreational area will see dramatic developments as a number of
shops
were
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demolsished
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demolished
, a new road will be constructed and many houses will be built. With regard to recreational facilities, the row of
shops
which is situated in the north of the town will be completely destroyed and a new bus station, shopping
center
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, car park and new housing will be set up in that location.
On the other hand
, the
shops
which
stands
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to the south of the main road will not
changed
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. Considering
residential
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the residential
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area, a new housing will be constructed to the south of the
shops
.
In addition
, the car park in the southwest of the town will be rebuilt to reduce its size.
Also
, where the
pedestrisation
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pedestrianisation
predestination
stands, there used to be a main road.
Finally
, the dual carriageway will be built around the
center
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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