Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

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should help
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with generous assistance when facing natural
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statement because it is human to help others when they are in need and
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have the technology, resources and funding that may be of great assistance to
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ones. Developed
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have adequate monetary funds and
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supplies that can sustain poor
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facing natural
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that are experiencing droughts, can receive
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, to mitigate starvation and promote quality of life.
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, earthquakes can destroy poor
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’ infrastructure,
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it is the duty of the developed country to assist with monetary funds to rebuild the nation.
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, In 2017, the country of Mozambique had terrible floods that destroyed many people’s homes and about 150 people died. Wealthy
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like South Africa, and China, assisted by providing temporary accommodation and
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, it can be noted that developed
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have the means to assist poor
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in times of natural
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can offer humanitarian aid
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as medical facilities and technology to assist
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experiencing natural hazards.
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, after floods, poor
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face
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of diseases, leading to high mortality rates,
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developed
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offer medical services to promote quality of life.
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, outbreaks of diseases like cholera and malaria are a result of floods and have resulted in an increase in deaths, rich
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can provide medication to cure and treat these diseases.
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, worthy
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have a significant role to play in assisting developing
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. In conclusion, since rich
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have adequate resources, I strongly agree that they should provide a helping hand with humanitarian relief to poor
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in times of natural
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. They may provide them with
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, clothing, medical help, shelter, equipment, and funding .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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